Jackson's+Story

Dedication

It was a dark and stormy night. I walked along Main Street with my sister, Josie, and her best friend, Eileen. We were on our way to see a movie, but we were regretting our decision to leave the comfy warmth of our homes and brave the wild weather. My umbrella had broken several blocks back where we had been forced to park our car and now rain was dripping off my nose as if I was some sort of wild tree. Eileen and Josie both wore long raincoats and had the hoods up so they looked like potential criminals. I had been too staunch to wear a coat and now I was regretting my bravery. Was this movie really worth it? By the time we ran into the movie theatre, I was so wet I looked like I had been swimming in my jeans and t-shirt. Puddles had splashed water all up the legs of my jeans and water down my front and back had left me drenched as a rat. When I sat down in my movie seat, I felt as wet and uncomfortable as a baby in nappies. But then the movie began. Within moments I had forgotten all about my dampness and was enthralled in the pictures on the screen. I slowly dried out over the next two hours as I laughed at the amusing movie. By the time we left the movie theatre I was fully dry and happy. The rain had stopped and we walked back to our car without getting wet. It was a good night.

SUSANNAH: I liked this story because I could relate to the feeling of getting really wet on my way somewhere. One thing I would have liked to know more about was what the movie actually was that you went to see and why was it so funny?

JOSEPH: I wonder if you could make the first and last sentences more vivid and memorable?

CHRIS: I really liked this story because of how descriptive the images are. I really feel like it was a dark and stormy night.

SARAH: I agree with Chris, but the ending was a bit abrupt. I want to read more!